The plane wades
through cotton corn
seeded by vapour
trails - these clouds swell
as white tumours
gorged by rain.
Like brain scans,
earthly and ghostly
on a death canvas
lit by fluorescent finalities.
Blood TestA needle veersBlood Test by julietcaesar
pulsing with pathogen.
as the tickle-sting
of metal piercing skin
ripples goosebumps down my arm.
smothers the pinprick,
with a gunshot wound.
Sticky skin flesh
stems the flow.
Rock climbingMy skin callousedRock climbing by julietcaesar
I lift off,
like dirt flecks
as I excavate
from fatigued muscle
trying to scale angles
but drawing air.
I lunge, spinning,
and find grip.
slowed by spool
by still earth.
The art of subbing To punctuate properlyThe art of subbing by julietcaesar
is to pause speech
with a stray bullet
and that means
Forget the free-flow
of your runaway sentence;
choke off all circulation
of such gangrenous language.
Let the red ink bleed
across paper so thick
with typed scrawl
not even a tourniquet
from prose so convoluted.
Watch as word-flesh is stripped
and a blinking cursor
applies a skin graft
over the amateur stitching
of your story.
Words are wheeled out
sterile but alive.
|Comments and critiques are very much appreciated.|
Summer SnowDecember 3rd 2010Summer Snow by julietcaesar
"Daddy, can we take a photo with Santa? Please?"
John Snow glanced at the bulbous red shape on the sleigh and scowled. It was only midday and the line stretched from the sleigh to the bookshop fifty metres down. It twisted and turned with the hundreds of Christmas shoppers that packed the shopping centre, their hot sweaty bodies jostling against him and his daughter Maddy. She strained towards the line with her head, eyes wide and desperate.
"Please, Daddy! I want to see Santa."
"You can see him from here."
Maddy's lips formed into a pout. "You know what I mean, Daddy."
John could feel the blast of cold air from a hidden air-conditioner, but it was not enough to dry up the sweat running down his face. The temperature outside was fast reaching thirty degrees Celsius and set to hit mid-thirties. He pictured his car melting alongside the pitiful Christmas shopping they had done so far: a couple of books, some toys, wrapping paper that was already torn on the corner. Madd
The ListenerIt's funny how we choose to walk the path opposite to the one Life offers us. We choose to endure the hard times when we could easily pull the plug. We choose to hurt ourselves so much the only way out seems to be kicking the bucket, and yet we swing and miss deliberately. Personally, it confounds me. What are people scared of? The glaring nothing that is death, for those who don't believe in the afterlife? To me, the answer is pretty damn simple: just do it, because you won't be frightened about it when you're dead.The Listener by julietcaesar
Mind you, that doesn't mean I'm encouraging suicide or anything. I might be, I could be, but you can interpret almost anything weird nowadays. Partly the reason why I keep my mouth shut. The other part's because it's more interesting to listen; it's amazing what sort of shit comes out of people's mouths if someone stopped to just listen. I make it my job really. I'd spend hours in a park listening to mother griping and days in the local McDonald's listening to f
The Non-SmokerIsn't it strange how you can see a person everyday and feel like you haven't known them in years? You know, you see them at school, acting normal when they're not, or you see them on the football field picking the daisies and running away from you as though a rabid dog was on their tail. You would think I should be the one being scared, because dogs chase me more than girls, but the girl I'm thinking about thought differently. A shame though, because she thought I was actually interesting.The Non-Smoker by julietcaesar
Maybe I should start at the beginning.
Amy's her name. Amy Bradshaw, cheerleader, obsessed with miniskirts. She had another obsession.
Every morning at the bus stop, she pretended to read Ray Bradbury but I knew she was looking at me. Or what's left of me, anyway. Tom Harvey, nerd, obsessed with cigarettes. Except I don't smoke them. What started out as an art project became an all-consuming passion to turn every person into a chain-smoker at Salisbury High. It was a money-spinner and a psychology ex
Peeling a Potato-Shaped YouI picked you up from a gutter in radioactive Russia. Somehow, you had fallen out of the body-bag you were carried in, and I nearly kicked you further into the muck. I heard your pleas though, begging for my hands to pick you up. They ate a hole in the fabric and sent you rolling before my feet. In normal circumstances, that would never happen, but there is nothing normal about a world covered in grief.Peeling a Potato-Shaped You by julietcaesar
You were a real piece of work. It's got to be expected after all, in these parts, but you were still fascinating all the same. For instance, you were covered in that signature brown dirt. Most of the time, it was brushed neatly before you were zipped up. But you'd been out too long in the open and it showed. Reptilian shoots punched through your skin and waved like a many-armed grotesque plant. They looked like bleached coral that decided to grow out of your flesh rather than in the nutrient-rich sea. As I ran my fingers over your suppurating sores, I wondered why I picked up the sort of
The Narrative OC MEMEI. Choose up to five (5) of your favorite original story characters that will embark in this role-play. If you don't have five (5) then leave them blank (or create a character on the spot!) Be sure to give a little description of them:The Narrative OC MEME by MeAsTheNarrator
II. One of your characters decides to make a grand entrance into a random tavern. How does that go? Pick either Character One or Character Four :
III. Jealous, Character Three tries to make a grand entrance as well but somehow fails why is that?
IV. A character is surrounded by many enemies and decides that the only thing they can do is fight! How does that go? Pick either Character Two or Character Five
V. Character Three is depressed and decides to get drunk.
VI. An event like no other takes place and Character One and Character Two get into a battle to the death. Who wins?
VII. Character Four or Character Five accidentally drink a love potion. Who do they fall in love wit
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A Guide to Writing StyleA Guide to Writing Style by illuminara
Writing Style - The Bottom Line
Words are like sunbeams. The more they are condensed, the deeper they burn. - Robert Southey
Prose is architecture, not interior decorating. - Ernest Hemingway
Writing style is made up of two things: cadence and variation.
Good style is clear, readable, and invisible. Its purpose is not to attract attention to itself but to transport readers into the world of your story. If your readers notice your style without purposefully intending to study it, your style needs to be improved and refined. Good style, however, is transparent so that your readers simply see the characters and world of your story rather than the words you use to portray them.
To write with cadence simply means that your writing should sound natural. If it sounds right to you, it probably is--but if it doesnt sound right,
Grammar GuideGrammar Guide For Self-Editing or Editing GroupsGrammar Guide by LateNightLady
by Kelly Mortimer ©2008
A Awkward Sentence Structure Rearrange, rephrase, or try deleting unnecessary words.
Aa Additive Adjunct No comma before too when its the last word of a sentence, and too means also. Ex: Jane graduated from high school too. Use a comma when too appears elsewhere and still means also. Ex: Jane, too, graduated from high school.
Ap- Attribution Punctuation When using an attribution such as said, dont use a period at the end of the preceding sentence. Use a comma, a question mark, or an exclamation point. Dont capitalize he, she, they. Exs: I have to move into a new house, she said. --Its huge! she said. -- Im going to live here? she asked [or said]. If the attribution comes before the sentence, use a comma. Ex: She add
Writing 101 - Func.Sent.Persp.Writing 101 - Func.Sent.Persp. by nycterent
Functional Sentence Perspective (FSP)
1) What is it?
The functional sentence perspective looks at how language functions in the act of communication. It pays special attention to context and questions related to the theme-rheme (topic-focus) structure of a sentence.
Rheme is the part of a sentence that gives further information on the topic (the theme).
A sentence combines old information with new information. The position of the information tends to emphasize how it should be understood.
The new information tends to appear near the end of the sentence, while the beginning acts to put it into context.
-- Tomorrow, we will drive to the park.
-- We will drive to the park tomorrow.
In the first sentence, the speaker assumes that it is known that the event will happen tomorrow, and clarifies only what will happen ("drive to the park"). Thus "park" and "drive" are both potentially new i
|I don't know if I will have the time to write anymore letters|
Because I might be too busy trying to participate.
So if this does end up being the last letter,
I just want you to know that I was in a bad place before I started high school
And you helped me.
Even if you didn't know what I was talking about
Or know someone who's gone through it.
You made me not feel alone.
Because I know there are people who say all these things don't happen.
And there are people who forget what it's like to be sixteen when they turn seventeen.
And know these will all be stories someday
And our pictures will become old photographs
And we'll all become somebody's mom or dad.
But right now these moments are not stories.
This is happening.
I am here and I am looking at her
And she is so beautiful.
I can see it.
This one moment when you know you're not a sad story,
You are alive.
And you stand up and see the lights on buildings
And everything that makes you wonder,
When you were listening to that song
On that drive with the people you love most in this world.
And in this moment, I swear, we are infinite.
|"Sometimes it's easy to forget that we spend most of our time stumbling around the dark. Suddenly, a light gets turned on and there's a fair share of blame to go around. I can't speak to what happened before I arrived, but all of you have done some very good reporting here. Reporting that I believe is going to have an immediate and considerable impact on our readers. For me, this kind of story is why we do this." |
-Marty Baron (Spotlight)
|"It is of extreme public interest that no conduct should be permitted which is likely to prevent a litigant in a court of justice from having his case tried free from all matter of prejudice. But the administration of justice, important though it undoubtedly is, is not the only matter in which the public is vitally interested; and if in the course of the ventilation of a question of public concern matter is published which may prejudice a party in the conduct of a law suit, it does not follow that a contempt has been committed. The case may be one in which as between competing matters of public interest the possibility of prejudice to the litigant may be required to yield to other and superior considerations. |
The discussion of public affairs and denunciation of public abuses, actual or supposed, cannot be required to be suspended merely because the discussion of the denunciation may, as an incidental but not intended by-product, cause some likelihood of prejudice to a person who happens at the time to be a litigant."
Ex parte Bread Manufacturers Ltd; Re Truth & Sportsman Ltd (1937) 37 SR NSW at 249.
I have hated the words and I have loved them, and I hope I have made them right. The Book Thief, Markus Zusak|
Eight years is a long time to be here on deviantART. I basically grew up here surrounded by many wonderful people who have taught me important life lessons. And there's still so much to learn.
I'm a writer and will always be one. I believe in the power of language and the imagination to transform people's lives. I currently make my living in the real world as a medical journalist, and study law part-time. Ideally I'm hoping to stay in journalism, but if I do have to go into law, I'm leaning towards media law or medical law.
I mostly post flash fiction and short stories on dA, though I've been writing more poetry recently. I've also done my fair share of novels, but nothing worth publishing at this stage!
I've been published in a flash fiction collection. And outside of dA, I've been published in print, online, radio and TV on news, features and even opinion.
The most important thing for me is to strive for improvement and enjoy the inane madness that writing brings to my life.
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